Dialogue: Point 4

Many editors find tags with adverbs or ‘ing’ verbs cliché.  I must agree.

Examples:

“You don’t love me anymore,” she said, weeping.

or

“After eighteen years and eight children, you have the nerve to tell me that you’re in love with another woman.  Thanks a lot.  You are a bastard.”  She turned away from him.

“Where’s the shotgun?” he asked, excitedly.

or

“Where’s the ammo?  Where’s the shotgun?” he asked and slammed his back against the door.

Hint:  Stick with:  he said, she said.

I won’t tell you to never use an adverb or an ‘ing’ verb with dialogue, but I will say, “Only rarely, or you’ll look like an amateur.”

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