Dialogue: Point 4

Many editors find tags with adverbs or ‘ing’ verbs cliché.  I must agree.


“You don’t love me anymore,” she said, weeping.


“After eighteen years and eight children, you have the nerve to tell me that you’re in love with another woman.  Thanks a lot.  You are a bastard.”  She turned away from him.

“Where’s the shotgun?” he asked, excitedly.


“Where’s the ammo?  Where’s the shotgun?” he asked and slammed his back against the door.

Hint:  Stick with:  he said, she said.

I won’t tell you to never use an adverb or an ‘ing’ verb with dialogue, but I will say, “Only rarely, or you’ll look like an amateur.”


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